the tune sounds really good and im feelin it for the most part but your drop was a little abrupt for me and im feelin what lucid said, your mix down is a little off things come in at akward times and well everythings there but needs to be put it in the right place its a little erratic at points, and your break down is tight but really long imo. It would be kinda awkard to play. Just put it down again and eq a little better!
I think the crash is too loud on the drops, drums a bit low overall, just a tiny bit i rate. You got the vibe tho, cant take that away from ya. Sounds quite pro.
Feelin it, very nice.
To be honest tho you wanna get a copy of Cubase or Logic and get this sounding tight.