Can anyone help me with this tune???

[Dr. Ophalus]

Please help me...

I really do not know what to do with it:

http://www.phonic-live.com/stream.asp?trackid=332&fname=Dr.m3u&pagenumber=1&page=track

Appreciate any feedback

 

[dtronic]

well...don't like that only synth.
maybe you should get more synths in that tune.
beats should be compressed more imo, more layering.
more hihats, some cymbals, rides etc.
then try to get FX into that tune.
and of course, the synth seems quite boring to me, just that jump up style, (which doesn't even sound like jump up)

i like that perc that is coming in the second part.

keep work on.