Like it! I think that intro would definitely sound sick in the mix, layed over the break or outro of another tune before knocking people out with some dark vibes! the only thing I not sure about is that detuned synth with the slow attack.
i like what happens at 2:46 it needs more weird elements like that with strange sweeps and reverbs and things. its really cleanly, (i like the kick btw, its character comes out 100%) the mix is squeaky clean but the tune is pretty repetitive, that bass synth is from a vsti you programmed right? so you could probably do a bunch of sick variations on the riff pretty easy (for exmple).