First D&B Song

[Warehouse]

I've been using Reason 4 now for about a fortnight and I've really struggled to get a track together. I finally managed to knock this up in about 50 minutes, you'll be able to tell. I'm not so keen, but I'm more looking for constructive critisism and what direction to go in. So any comments would be greatly appreciated. Here goes.

I know the 'bwa' sounding bass is very sharp and sounds quite choppy and the arrangements are quite poor. Just need some confirmation of the accuracy of my own critisisms. Ha.

http://uk.youtube.com/watch?v=qjEhfIBKCQc

 

[sotalex]

needs more high hats and percussion

 

[co0ke]

id say spend more time on individual sections. don't move on until you are really happy with how something sounds, try and think about the stuff u like to hear, and would u listen to it if u didnt make it?

u can easily spend 50 minutes on a 4 second drum riff, and imo that is gonna benefit u much more than 50 on a project

 

[Fratanize]

deffo go and listen hard to stuff you like and try to pick out all the elements that make the tune.