The intro reminds me of an old Amiga game, but it works well. I like the use of vocals. I agree with Subprime, the actual patterns of your drums are spot on but they just need a bit more weight behind them! Try layering another snare underneath, maybe cut off the tail of it so it's short and snappy to help give it a bit more punch. Also maybe try some subtle compression on your kick to help it punch through the mix a little more.
Apart from that tho mate this has got some serious potential