I dig the groove of the track and the selection of sounds. Here's a couple thoughts:
- There's a lot of action going on in the mid-high and high frequencies. You should get into some of those sounds and perform some surgical EQ. The constant frequency clashing is taking away from the snare a bit and creating a bit of phase cancellation.
- It's all a bit repetitive and lacking structure. I'll assume because this is still a w.i.p.