Who can give me feedback on my latest mixdown?

[t0rben]

Hi guys,

I'm about to finish that tune here. Just don't have access to monitors at the moment and mixing on headphones only. So I find it very difficult to judge at the moment, what's wrong here?

https://soundcloud.com/t0rben%2Ftime-will-come-wip

On my beyerdynamics it sounds okaaaay, but on my shitty ipod buds the drums seem to loud and the lead and mellow parts are not cutting through. Also I can't really get a feeling for the level of sub needed. LoL, and now looking at the waveform in soundcloud it looks like I limited it too hard too
Anyway, hope somebody can have a listen and help me out here.

Any feedback much appreciated

 

[t0rben]

bump

 

[Elzerk]

Cut everything below ~30-20hz and above ~20khz unless you have already. Give the reese louder harmonics. That pluck shit is it a guitar? Maybe turn it up, the drums are a bit louder than anything else.