yeh thats pretty good for your first go, something to me sounds out of key though, cant quite figure out what. check out my stuff ive been producing about the same amount of time as you i guess (about 5 months) http://soundcloud.com/zerozero00
interesting sound, I like where its going, more variation would be good, esp with that kind of techno influence, the tech elements need to b progressive and morph to really bring it to life imo, nice start tho
switch the drums up man, youve got some nice drum fills in here so after that you could have a thin shaker layer come in, or a percussion loop, or ride cymbals, you could have a drone come in, build up effects, or even a stripped down section where there is less drums and effects but the beat goes steppy or something theres so many possibilites really u got the basis down
im sure i have told you these things before tho :p
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we can always collab on it and finish it if you want mate but u might want to do ur own thing with it
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sorry you have actually switched the drums up a bit, but just need to be more of a "switch" you know?