Thin and Crispy - Dream

Discussion in 'New Talent & Track Reviews' started by Thin and crispy, Apr 23, 2010.

  1. Thin and crispy

    Thin and crispy Active Member

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    A track a made quite a while ago! Its very messy tbh wanting opinions etc, basicaly is it worth me re-doing the whole thing and cleaning it up, how i could improve it, maybe change a few bits here n there! usual drill
    All comments appreciated good or bad :)

    http://soundcloud.com/thin-and-crispy/dream

    Thin

    p.s. i know the drums are realy quite lol =/
     
  2. Alexi

    Alexi Drench Audio

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    really like the synth parts, maybe beef them up later in the process, and a bit more melodic change, cos that one bass note does get a little boring

    I think you know about the drums, liven them up with a break over the top and definately layer some more to give a bigger sound

    tbh mate I think your a bit over critcal in what you say about the track, nice ideas just needs some work on the execution
     
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    cheers man, maybe i am over criticle >< deffiantly gonna have another stab at this 1 tho i think, i made it months ago ill try an apply to it what ive learnt since then if u know what i mean.
     
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    I think more texture on the beats would go a long way, maybe a careful use of some break could do it.

    The synth sound is cool but the melody needs some change-ups, like a chorus in a pop song.