original idea. the trick with making a tune with lots of lo-fi type noises is to meet it in the middle with an element of groove. grimey is good, but it needs to have some flow so that it can be danced to. At the moment its the track in the club that stops everyone dancing and gurns at each other. you can have some grime that winds down before it kicks off into a smoother faster bassline.
slower tracks should have some very high profile basslines too. big sounding and technical. yours is a kind of compressed growl.
keep at mate.