still strugglin. Liquid track in progress

[slambox]

here is another track i have started. still struggling with dynamics

http://soundcloud.com/lazyboy/riser-harpochronic

 

[Skuff]

Not bad mate.. I like the ideas, but some of the automation is a bit off on the synth in one or two spots, and synth sounds a bit throaty if you know what i mean? Are you using Reason? as the main synth sounds very subtractor-ee

 

[jimjimjim]

drums come through nice and clear good job
think maybe more structure needed to the tune? no intro really - if you see what i mean. also the main lead gets a wee bit repatative after a bit - maybe add more breakdowns/variations
peace.

 

[neddez]

yeah it gets a bit monotonous, although at 20 seconds when that synth came in i thought you were gonna go all mistabishi on me with some sweet ass melody (he's particularly good with that sort of thing)

i think the main issue is that everything sounds stuck on a beat. dont be afraid to have things come in whenever, as long as they sound good

oh yeah and dont have the bline playing for the whole track lol

 

[Nautilus]

the wob is excessive and makes the tune sound cheese. IMO sin/squarewaves sound much better for rollers than saw, which gets very grating if it is isolated in a song like you have. The bassline sounds a lot better in the second half when (it sounds like) you get off the 1-note every bar formula. If you are going to do a tech bassline you need more than sin wobs to make it interesting. play with pitchbending, stutters, etc.still needs an additional mid-tone, whether that is strings/pad/vocals.

 

[slambox]

cheers lads. im usin studio 1.. still learnin this thing.. thank you for the words