um, not sure the amen at the first drop works? when it gets later on (about 1.15) this seems to make more sense?
seeing as its your first remix, i'm guessin you still aint to hot on mixdowns yet? i cant tell you how to mix it down better, but i can tell you it needs to be mixed down better?!
for example, there really is no bottom end to the tune... and since this is drum and
bass, that needs to punch through more! the sonice music could probably do with some compression to bring the levels of each note/sound in check etc etc
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ps.
http://dnbforum.com/forumdisplay.php?21-New-Talent-and-Track-Reviews - this is where you post tracks for review
and also, get a soundcloud account, they are free and wont ruin the tune like youtube compression