like the main bass man.
tune seems to be lacking low end though. cat hear a sub, and kick seems more of a pop.
i'd try and do another mixdown and bring lows up more if possible.
good start though man.
Hey dude - Just had a listen - I really like the bass line and the fact that you have layered it up One idea that might be worth trying is to add an LFO to the filter on one of the layers through some sections of the tune. I think overall you perhaps need to go through the tune and make some interesting edits as breaks i.e. at the end of every other 4th or 8th bar.
AS for the drumz I think you need to add more layers to make them sound a bit more phatter - Have you considered adding an amen break over some sections ? How do you typically make your drum loops ?
Overall I like the idea and would be keen to hear a finished copy Nice work...