Not much sub bass going on, a lot of distortion (or is it clipping?) That sound you've used for a snare is a bit odd. To pull this off I'd reckon you need to tighten up the drums forever, get some proper double million metal stylee kick drums happening with a good snare and a bit more control over the over-all sound.
The idea is cool and proper dark. First track eh? Did you meet Neomind yet? He could probably give you some good adxice for this business.
Thanks for the advice mate, i'll have a crack at doing some work on it. What do you mean by tightening up the drums forever? And also, any ideas where i can get some good refills for this kind of sound? Haven't met neomind yet, i'll have to try and get in touch with him