first of all I want to suggest that you edit your post that your link is enclosed within [ soundloud ] [ /soundcloud ] tags without any spaces. People are lazy and more likely to review your track, if the don't have to leave the site.
Now to your track: I like it. The breaks are spot on and there's really nothing wrong with it except one major thing: the breakdown at about 1:20. You cannot just fade it out like that. You have to figure out a way around that.