oppions please

[IV4]

Working on this song with my three year old boy. Wanted to get some feedback on what could be done better before I go on with the track.

https://soundcloud.com/iv4%2Fmore-liam

 

[Fishy:)]

very interesting intro man;P but it does remind me of toilet lol.
Anyways, ur drum needs to punch more, that snare isent hitting enough or the kick, need more perc to imo
bass has potential but still sounds abit dry, would try some more or diffrent modulations and add more sub please and less high freqs

 

[luciduk]

maybe stick to writing without your infant doesnt sound like his techniques are helping you, altho they do say its better to start young!!!

 

[BLoodstaiN`]

too much high mid's i think,
Nice concept though,
it's got me moving!