Noisebound - Sunrise

[Noisebound]

Hey everyone, I made my first track a few days ago (first, which i posted on the internet). I'm producing about a year and a half, I'm using Ableton Live. Want to know someone's opinion about it, maybe some advices.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AaaN4EH_V0E
http://soundcloud.com/noisebound/noisebound-sunrise

Oh, and forgot to mention that I've done this on slow pc that BS' d me about twenty times while creating this track

 

[Neural Tech]

Intro is well done. I think the Drums could be brighter... they didn't sound like they were cutting through as well as they could (could just be my cheap headphones though). Track is nice and Rolly, but it needs some variation... and a short (15-30 seconds) BrkDwn at some point would be interesting.

I thought the 'Fade Out' ending was cheesey.


Fantastic track for being your "first track"!
:keeponjammin:

 

[Noisebound]

Thanks for the comment. Now when i listened it few more times, i agree with you, drums could really be brighter and punchier. I am working on the other track at the moment. I've already made nice beat similar to amen break which I'm going to use in it.

 

[subprime]

As Proto said, it's the drums that don't quite cut it. They are very muffled. Check the difference between that amen you drop in for 1 bar and your main break. The amen sounds like a breath of air then it's gone.

For that length of track it needs a breakdown or change up for me.

Didn't mind the fade out, gotta finish somehow.

Apart from that, nice atmosphere, high synths are alright, sub might be a bit boomy but it's hard to tell with the drums not balancing it out well enough.