The tune is ok...needs alot of work tho before you could actually dance/listen to it....sorry to be so harsh...but sometimes you gotta be...Keep mucking bout with the softwear your using...and get sum tempo on them tunes...(speed the song up) also play around with the bass....
the tracks have soul them, nothing to really grab you and pull you in. dnb needs to 172 to 180bpm (tops) no idea what tempos these are but its either too fast or too slow. listen to certain artists that your feeling, an use it for track layouts and structuring. Your a very long way off from a complete tune, but some of the ideas can definitley be worked on. harsh but fair