the drums sound pretty good, could be a little cleaner. vocals are a little loud, bass sounds low on my system. overall i think the ideas in your track are good. this just needs a bit of mixdown to clean up the overall sound.
yeah that's where im hitting a bit of a roadblock to be honest i'm equing each instrument of my tack etc to try and sit nicely in the mix but i don't really know how to do the complete mixdown.