Oh man........you really need to work on all aspects of this track. Structure if way off, sound design leaves alot to be desired and the mixdown is quite honestly atrocious! Sorry.
Agree with what's been said. Sounds like its been recorded with a phone? Also sounds like your pretty new to it all. Some good idea's, you just need to work on the execution
The synths has some good ideas mate
Though I gotta agree with the above, feel free to keep posting updates of the song tho, we might be able to help you get a sense of direction in this track
Ok, the tune is almost done . New drums have been made, and I mixed it a bit, sound much better than previous one. Re-structurised the tune, maybe it`s still a bit repetitive, but today I haven`t more time to work with this... http://soundcloud.com/ry4ndnb/ry4n-calling-v-2