Nice one on the intro, it's much more DJ friendly now and drops in exactly at the 1 min 6 mark I was talking about. If it were me, I'd still think about including a broken down outro straight from where you currently end the track, slowly removing the low end and extending the length of the track as a whole. Sometimes you can treat the outro a bit like a breakdown section where most of the element, esp main perc and bass are removed but it ends, allowing the track to continue and subtly die down during a mix rather than a sudden stop. If there's a lot going on and it ends quickly, often you run into mixes with less continuity between tracks that don't give enough at each end to work with. I don't think I've ever made a DnB track under 4 mins and they are often at least 5. This is unless you are going for a radio edit in mind, in which the track usually needs a short intro and outro which keep them smaller but make it tougher to mix smoothly. Again though, just study existing tracks you like and see how they work theirs out.
I think the reverb may be a touch too much on the elements which I often find cause the individual percussion hits and elements in general to get lost easier in the background. By reducing this you bring sounds closer to the front. I came from a dance music background as opposed to the other way round and would often add more verb than was necessary. Often, snares are quite dry and upfront to help them cut through.
I listened to your first mix of the three on SC (as you still have them up), so I could do comparisons, and noticed that there was originally way too much low end/low mid which has been tightened up somewhat in the later ones. I also listened to a few other tracks and would say that while they are quite interesting as ideas, the common issue among them all is that they have too much in the low end and low mids. It causes the elements to swell together and doesn't allow the track to breathe enough, also effecting the clarity of the midrange. Like in Running man, I've just been A and Bing a new one of mine against that and the thing that I notice the most is how the track doesn't breathe as much and has less dynamic range with a suppressed mid range also effecting the snare, effectively pushing it into the mix. I had to a similar thing with my new track where I made the decision to get rid of a lot of low end, depite thiking it sounded amazing with more. I always do a lot of A and B'ing with released tracks and try to keep the balance in a similar region. Bass and muddyness are very easy to make mistakes with and this is especially noticable when using a system with lack of bass. Definitely get into the habit of using a specrum analyser too as you can keep an eye on levels better.
Get into the habit of using subtractive eq to cut. It's always a learning curve though and I'm still trying to learn much the same after making music for 13 years or so.