i like your ideas, and all of your synths and stuff all sound pretty well EQ'd and everything. but it feels to me like some of your sections are just kinda thrown in, all you need to do i think is just make sure all your sounds and different sections merge together a little better, bringing up the frequencies of certain sounds and things like that. otherwise good tune man nice work
drums are probably a bit too quiet -- could use some layering to add some depth. the intro noise is really loud and when the drums come inthe whole thing sounds quieter, you wanna make sure when the track comes in full force it appears to be at it's loudest so back off on the mix compression and do a drum buss for that if the compressed effect is what you're going for.
you should also spend some time with FX and what not on your synth elements, plenty of room for more interesting timbre here