need critics

Discussion in 'New Talent & Track Reviews' started by Schizorabbit, Oct 26, 2013.

  1. Schizorabbit

    Schizorabbit New Member

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    this is the 3rd track I ever uploaded
    (I originally wanted to make it more synthbased but my pianotardness forced me to fill the 2nd half with pianosounds)
    I need some feedback so that I can develope / make better music
     
  2. MisterApe

    MisterApe 8bit junkie

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    Some of those sounds need some serious eq'ing to make the hi's less piercing in the ears.
    Interesting ideas though!
     
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  3. Pyrococcus

    Pyrococcus Urban Break Twister

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    Mental :)
    However the piano chords from 0:45 to 1:15 are just too dull, and the tune is lacking a bassline.
     
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    Catsel Well-Known Dismember

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    u got like 5 tunes in there..

    the intro is actually amazing. the best part imo. sounds like an alix perez tune.. then it drops and i am dissapoint...

    0:40-0:43 wud make a sick jamp up tune.

    1:16-1:24 wud make a beautiful calibre sounding liquid tune. literally make the whole tune with that lil bit..

    etc etc..
     
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  5. Dark Lizardro

    Dark Lizardro The Lizard that has a hammer Staff Member

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    I don't know if MisterApe, Pyrococcus and Castel felt the same thing, but to me it felt like the whole song was "muffled". I believe there are something going on the lower frequencies. Just check that out. Composition-wise, it's a good track, I liked the piano parts! I love when synthesized sounds are mixed with "organic" sounds.
     
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