My latest attempt..

[Kaz1983]

OK so everyone knows, I know it's not finished and that also I'm not Original Sins other brother.

This is my second jump up, it wasnt meant to be but just turned out that way -

http://soundcloud.com/navy-blue/faces-of-war

Fire away, I'll take cover...

 

[Jolly Jumpa]

Beat/drums are decent. A little too limited/compressed. Orchestra seems a little weak; add a few reverbs/delays on there too. Vocal is a little loud and a slight nudge of a long decayed reverb. Bass = none PUMP IT! Effects are a little loud.
Jump up aint my cup of tea so it's harder for me to judge, but if those suggestions IMO it would of sounded a little better
Keep it up,
Steve (aka Dj Synergex)

 

[Kaz1983]

The ideas are there but thats about all atm ... will hopefully change soon.

Cheers for the advice.