My first proper attempt at dnb - tell me honestly what you think

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  1. Berlitz

    Berlitz "JUnGle BiZneSS"

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    Riisu Not the Preacher Man

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    the video lies.
     
  3. Berlitz

    Berlitz "JUnGle BiZneSS"

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    No mate!
    Thats my set up
    ;)
     
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    Berlitz "JUnGle BiZneSS"

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    Please tell me what you think.:wave:
     
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    hankevans83 jump up production!!

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    well i dunno if im experienced enuff to comment,
    but ide say....and i dont mean this badly but its a little well...........soft?
    sounds like choones from the jungle mania era!
    if this is your style then ide say it was pretty good!!

    drums sound quiet clean but again i dont have enuff time producing under my belt to comment further. that said its a thumbs up from me!
     
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    Berlitz "JUnGle BiZneSS"

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    Cheers mate, I just need as much comments as I can get, so I can take it all on board . It gets a bit repetetive sitting here listening to the same loops,
    -EZ mate
     
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    I really like it man. Drums are very good for a 'first proper attempt', but I think they still need a bit of work to get this up to the standard of tracks being released. I really don't think its far off though (y)
     
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    Berlitz "JUnGle BiZneSS"

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    Cheers im going to individually transfer it all to reason with midi and finish it off tonight! What else do you think I could do? what could I add to it?
    - Ez Mate!!
     
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    logikz I Am Not The King Staff Member

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    tunes pretty good what you did. funkafied tune and all. shoot,. soooo... alrighhhhhht,,,./... you wana buy a cron sandwhich??
     
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    Berlitz "JUnGle BiZneSS"

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    Nevermind :D
     
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    Berlitz "JUnGle BiZneSS"

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    Cheers mate I took your advice and tried added a nice sub bass and kickin drum loop
    I had to go for the goodfellas samples, because I love it!!
     
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    JamesZero aka Zero Beats

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    I like the fact that the tread title is "first attempt at dnb" and the vid title is "second attempt at dnb" lol

    Anyway mate, I like the track... a promising start if your new to all this!

    Only thing I can think of off hand is the sub bass. I dunno if its my speakers but it sounds a little too deep... maybe ease up on the level of it.

    Apart from that its cool, would like to hear the final mix down.
     
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    Berlitz "JUnGle BiZneSS"

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    cheers mate, its the first "proper" as the first attempt was a cheat. I used the hospital records pack filled with just loops :D

    anyway cheers for the feedback! top stuff mate
     
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    Lucidproduction i aint fraid of no ghosts

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    good beat! i like d chill out stuff mate.

    it still sounds like u are playing a couple of pre-made loops to me, but dw,

    try cutting them up a bit or maybe throw in a different hi hat to spice it up and itll be special!
     
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    Not bad, had me bouncin' a bit in the chair here, with my headphones on...tryin' to think of what you can add, as I saw ya ask someone that on here...
    Did you draw out that bassline or is it a loop? If it's a loop, I see potential to switch it up, if ya have it in rex file, move around the pieces a bit and delete some, and along with it, open up a NN-19 sampler and use some pitch sweep bass to add after the little bassline snippet here and there..if ya did draw out that bassline, some pitch sweep bass would sound nice with two hits of it after the first 3 hits of the bassline, before the 2nd part of the bassline, hopefully that made sense..
    Try to find a melody or somethin' to throw in there in parts as well, mess around with some piano or somethin', ya know, what ever comes to mind while listenin' to it, as it did to me, ideas hittin me as I listened...
    it had good energy for sure when the bassline was kickin', and as another said on here, add some more percussion to the beat, ya know, give a little more life to the beat to "fill out" the track some more..
    Make a nice intro to it as well, that builds up to that kickin bassline with more percussion added to the break as it starts to flow along..
    That's what came to mind when listenin' to it..keep at it, pz & respect to ya!
     
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    its all wrong mate its a mess

    sort it out bro
     
  17. RevTech

    RevTech Butthole=output transduce

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    Work on the drop ;) Also a little less breaks of the beat. Bring the drums up a bit.

    Lastly, EQ and compresssiiionnn
     
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    Very good for 1st attempt , keep it up
    respect!
     
  19. ScottyEightSix

    ScottyEightSix HUGE EARS > COMEDY CHIN

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    Nice I like it, I like would like to hear the full track tho