Had a listen, its got a nice chilled vibe to it. The drums are done well, nice kick and rhythm. In my opinion the vocals could do with a bit less repetition or some sort of slowly automated effect.
But none the less, a beautiful tune.
Yeah, I've listened to the revised version and the remix sounds good bro The vocals fit into the composition quite well, maybe you could use some sort of ambient/echo effect on them to enhance how they sound. The mixdown is good and you could introduce right after it an additional melody/pad/string to give it a little boost. Overall a beautiful remix