sounds nice mate.
i recon it needs some more elements to it to keep it interesting tho.
maybe some keys but really reverbed an delayed dunno really.lol
also it need maybe a bit more percussion as it progresses bongos or sumfin.lol
i like it , but i wish there was more , im really not to sure what style your going for or what producers you are influenced by which is the long run is a good thing , for the simple fact its all orginal and thats what making music is all about!
you are going to need a hook of some kind , maybe some piano samples in the same key or even some synth to lead it on , it really depends what style of hiphop your going for.
ultimately youve made a great foundation but it needs more layers and maybe several different drum patterns to spice it up and to give the track some kind of groove.
ive checked your facebook and the ninth gate and inner city is more along the lines of hiphop