Work from the ground up. Get your drums down then get the bass mixed in equally powerfully before adding the extra bits. All your melodies are cool but they overpower the beat. Specifics. Change the snare for the drop (or layer it) Get a full sounding one. The kick needs to come through, maybe layer another with more attack. Add an amen and some extra hats, take down the volume on the cymbals. I'm a beginner as well but there's plenty of tutorials around to get you going, Chase and Status etc.
Nice tune tho, post it up again if you get it finished.