Intro is nice and ambient.
Gone a bit rocky now. Not sure if all the parts are gelling together.
Don't like the snare you've used......
Like the effected vocals in the breakdown.
Interesting mix of styles electro/rock/trance whatever. I like what you're trying to do. Not sure if this quite pulled it off.
I think it's the drums. Bit more power/crispness, cut through the mix and take control of the track. If that makes sense.