Well I'm not a producer but from listening to it I can tell you right now you need to increase the presence of the drums in the mix down. The main melody sounds wicked, but it literally overpowers everything else in the mix, including the bass sound but more worryingly the drums. The drums in general just seem a bit weak compared to the rest of the tune. The melody would lend itself to absolutely stomping percussion.
nice build up man... sounded intense but maybe needs a little more. anyway... what kind of thing are u going for with this track? not feeling the main riff personally its too simple and kinda boring, but over all the tune is alright yeh