Krimson - Descension (Dark Liquid DNB)

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  1. krimson

    krimson Member

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    My latest track. Atmospheric & dark liquid DNB.

    Any feedback/criticisms are welcome and appreciated! This is just my 3rd track in so I realize I still have lots to learn, so please don't hold back.

     
  2. brutality

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    Yo man

    I'd consider a snappier less mid-heavy snare sample, and perhaps also bringing its volume down a few db.
    Another thing: Try varying the atmosphere/pad progression elements. I feel like the song doesn't go anywhere melodically.

    Respect
     
  3. krimson

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    Cheers! Thanks for the feedback. I was feeling like it was a bit repetitive myself but couldn't work out any good transitions in the "melody". I tried to move the track more with the basswork and changes in the percussion. I will work on that further in the future.
     
  4. parsons19

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    Your third tune!? Woah, a lot of you beginners are sounding better than me already! :lol:

    I do also feel this tune doesn't do much though. Maybe add a Piano Melody? At 1.50 you could bring it in :) Just an idea.

    Nice work though!
     
  5. underspawn

    underspawn Headz Roll

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    What Brutality said, other than that the tune is pretty nice, sounds close to Mizst's stuff :D
     
  6. krimson

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    Well I think my strong computer/technical abilities have allowed me to breeze through the DAW/VST learning process. Mostly just my musical skills that bottleneck my progression.

    Thanks for the feedback everyone, much appreciated! I'll put some more work in the next track to try to keep the track moving more melodically.
     
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    Nice vibes, great atmosphere and vocal samples, really creepy feelings but very very nice!
     
  8. Rafi:ki

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    Man, for a 3rd track its very awesome, really digging it. Love the style, I have no advise at all, i like it all!

    Same here, love music, IT is my job, but music theory not my thing :/ the learning process when you never did any all your life is very long..

    Anyway, very good job mate!
     
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  9. logikz

    logikz I Am Not The King Staff Member

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    agreed, it needs a bit more variation and perhaps a rude element in there to give it purpose. like a lead or a warpy bass or something. its a fine tune and for a third tune its really impressive. i love the shaker, did you record that yourself?
     
  10. CoB

    CoB Pure Sanelessness

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    mad wibes!
    but yeh everyone has said it, variation is the key

    maybe try just small things like maybe for a few bars change the key?
    although i like the second drop! waaaaaaaaarp
    shakers and hats def sounding cool, and the "aaaaaaaah" type vocals, niceness
     
  11. krimson

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    Cheers everyone, comments appreciated!

    I've been working towards doing everything in my tracks from scratch, but I have to admit that the shaker is from a loopmasters pack. Sliced and re-programmed to fit the track a bit better.
     
  12. lostnthesound

    lostnthesound Burns Easily in the Sun

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    This track seems to be headed in the right direction. I like the eerie vibe, and the vocal fits seamlessly. It seems like there is a little "something" missing. Perhaps some breaks and the occasional bass stab? Just my .02.

    Cheers.