jonl - Finding peace

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  1. jonl

    jonl Member

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    EDIT: busy modifying it, there were some issues.

    Sorry for the disturbance, just gonna use this as a placeholder for now.

    OK, she's reuploaded.

    http://soundcloud.com/jonl/findingpeace

    Thanks to the guys who commented, you're feedback has helped to make a better tune, IMO.
     
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  2. djdevz

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    not bad track, but some issues for me imo...

    intro was waay too long...im not gonna lie, i skipped a lot in the beginning, decent atmos with the crashing waves etc, but keep it interesting as well
    ur lil snare cut before the drums kicks in a lil too loud,
    n i think ur drum loop could do with some variation, it sounds as though youve found a loop and just stuck it throughout the track.
    n i think ur bassline melody is not in the right key...well it kinda goes but some parts sound off.

    a couple of harsh words i no but im just being honest.
     
  3. Phat_Sam

    Phat_Sam Well-Known Member

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    Definately fits the title. I nearly fell asleep during the intro. in a good way! It is FAR too long though. lol

    again. the break needs to be varied up a bit.

    excellent padwork!

    nicely done sir!
     
  4. Thin and crispy

    Thin and crispy Active Member

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    loving the atmospherics and drums on this mate but i think it could be spruced up with a few sprinkles n sparkles here n there to give it a bit more colour :) its like you have a picturesque pond, with no fish ;p
    rly like this tho mate
     
  5. jonl

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    noted Gents, modifying it

    thnx thnx