I'm only listening on a laptop but from what I heard the drums aren't bad, the ideas aren't vad but I am not a fan of the synths at all too high pithched and dissonant and they resonate badly which is probably why it's getting slated.
i like the idea and i'm pretty confident that you can dig lower frequencies form the synth with some EQ, comping etc. lovely ideas in this though. i think it sound a bit to hollow for me, but great work mate
dont know about the switch up keep it swing-low mate turn down that high pitched alarm volumn too
I don't think it's as bad as you think. The end just sounds like a different tune because of the pace change. There's problems in the mixdown for sure: Not enough low punch in the bass, the drums are overly trebley and it's a bit choked up - there's too much going on. Try to focus on making the best of fewer sounds.