Hey man,
Thanks for the comments on my track. Normally, I wouldn't comment on your track because of what I'm about to say, but since you asked and you were nice enough to comment on mine, I'm gonna unfortunately say some harsh stuff.
I'm sorry to say, I'm not diggin' your track. Your sound choices... man, I can't think of a nice way to accurately state it, so I'll have to be horribly direct. The sound choices make me cringe. Sorry man. I listened to your other tracks and they all pretty much have similar issues. A lot of them sound like a nold video game.
I know you've gone through a bunch of work to make these and I really don't want to be an ass. I'm sorry I don't have much constructive to say, because they are just so far out of my interest. You had great comments on my track. I appreciate them and they seem right on.
I guess, what I would suggest for you is to pick a professional track that you love and try to recreate it very closely and learn from that. Try to get the essence of the track in your own material. I'm not saying the stuff I'm making is the best shit, but the stuff I used to make years ago was garbage. So, you just gotta keep at it.