Hey, any feedback appreciated!

[IndustrialDream]

Well this is my fourth attempt at producing Jump up I am feeling a lot more comfortable with music production as a whole

I am quite pleased with the tune but any feedback on it would be appreciated!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JY1x0lBPgWQ

 

[Neomind]

listening on monitors atm...
I can only hear the kick and snare, no clue of the hi hats.
Always in Jump up there are TONS of wishpering hi hats... check Ebony dubsters - Ra (Original Sin Remix)...
synths are banging, but the mixdown is pretty bad

 

[co0ke]

listening on monitors atm...
I can only hear the kick and snare, no clue of the hi hats.
Always in Jump up there are TONS of wishpering hi hats... check Ebony dubsters - Ra (Original Sin Remix)...
synths are banging, but the mixdown is pretty bad

dont feel like u have to do things a certain way just because its what someone tells u it should be like that, or what the genre 'always' sounds like. jus keep doing what u wanna do man

 

[IndustrialDream]

listening on monitors atm...
I can only hear the kick and snare, no clue of the hi hats.
Always in Jump up there are TONS of wishpering hi hats... check Ebony dubsters - Ra (Original Sin Remix)...
synths are banging, but the mixdown is pretty bad

Thanks for the feedback, I have not been producing long and have not yet purchased some monitors (using normal PC speakers) there is hi hats shakers and an break all layered in the drum pattern with some distortion I am not sure why they are not being picked up on your monitors. I will have to try get someone to master it for me! haha.