Help on this track please?

[owen1210]

https://soundcloud.com/oko-m%2Fbeta-track-1
Been working on this and would like to get some feed back and some advice on where to go with it. As i'm struggling a little it has to be said!

All comments welcome, i'll give some feed back on your tracks too

I use reaper and massive synth etc....

 

[Elzerk]

I'm listening on shittier than shitty speakers on a computer screen. Maybe I'll review this when I'm home and btw, you posted it in wrong thread

 

[owen1210]

Sound mate, it defo needs work. (LOTS of work). But err didn't realise i posted in the wrong thread any chance of someone moving it?