Halfbeat / liquid -- NEED FEEDBACK!!

Discussion in 'New Talent & Track Reviews' started by Fourstoriesdown, May 19, 2010.

  1. Fourstoriesdown

    Fourstoriesdown New Member

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    Basically, this is the stage i'm at:

    Sojourner - http://soundcloud.com/fourstoriesdown/sojourner

    Possibly need some vocals in order to keep it interesting in the first half?

    This is at no real state to be called finished, but i don't know where to go with it so... I need some real criticism on where to take it, what to change etc. FEEDBACK!

    Used: FL8, Ibanez GAX, Edirol ua3fx, KP3
    Poetry sample: Eunoia by christian bok

    If anyone wants to master this, be my guest!
     
  2. subprime

    subprime Dysjoint

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    Yeah, I actually like that man. The drums, well, shit, ctrl c v. But over-all it kinda worked for me. Maybe it was just because you have a guitar listed in your used list.........?hehe.
     
  3. Fourstoriesdown

    Fourstoriesdown New Member

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    What do you suggest for the drums? different velocity, sound etc? how would i achieve this? thanks for the feedback
     
  4. Cat Gas

    Cat Gas Aka Basis

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    for me, it could just be my speakers, but it seemed quite hissy at about 2.34 and that part of the tune.
    otherwise, nice and chilled, made me think of RJD2 (which is good)
     
  5. Mr Fletch

    Mr Fletch aka KRONIX

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    I'm loving the synth sounds, guitars and everything, real nice summer chillout vibe. But yeah, the drums need working on.

    What have you used for your drums? are they single hits or a break?

    I use FL8 too, so if you need any help just give me a nudge
     
  6. EvezDroppin

    EvezDroppin how to change name,......

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    really like it mate, almost fell asleep i was so chilled listening to it !
    guitar sounds really nice... some soft female vocals would fit well.. but nothing to overpower the song just to sit quite quiet in the mix.