First tune I've finished in years.

Discussion in 'New Talent & Track Reviews' started by st420, Feb 10, 2013.

  1. st420

    st420 Member

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    got more time these days to produce and this is the first tune i've finished in 3 years. i know its not super proffesional sounding but would would love to know what people think. bits that suck, bits that dont suck etc...

    thanks to those who check it out


     
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    I liked the intro; though maybe you could fade the drums in during the first :20 to make it smoother. I like the piano coming in after :20... I really like the bass and the lurching melody you have for it. By 2:00 I would like a bit more variety, or maybe a new voice coming in (there's room in the high frequencies). Semi-Breakdown at 2:35 came in at a good time. Second drop comes together well. By 4:00, again, I'd like a little more variation, or FX, or extra voice, or something. 4:26 is a nice transition back to the outro. It ended kinda abruptly.

    Solid track all-in-all. Had kind of a chill vibe...
     
  3. st420

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    thanks man! agree with everything you said
     
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    The filter in of the drums at 1:05 is a little bit abrupt for me. Maybe I would bring the start frequency or the Q up...

    Its a great track!
     
  5. st420

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    thanks man ill have a play around with it :)

    that trancey sounding tune of yours sounds dope, wikid build up
     
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    JoeCarlse -ToxicExit09-

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    I think the track as a whole is real nice, but i agree with kdk, it needs a little more variety in places! respect tho!
     
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    Thanks everyone for the comments! Hopefully have another one done soon. Agree with what everyone's said ill take that on board in my next one :)
     
  9. EvezDroppin

    EvezDroppin how to change name,......

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    sounds really nice, 32 after the drop, u need to switch it up, bring in other elements, some of the more melodic elements u have in the intro maybe, some vocals could work well too....

    I would cut the length of the track down a bit too unless you make quite a few changes, it sounds really nice as it is, just needs a bit of spicing up imo, bit of variaiton synth wise melody wise etc....

    but i do really like the track :) drums sound nice so does the bass
     
  10. horace111

    horace111 My name is Jago (HYQXYZ)

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    Beautiful man , loved the way the drums & bass interacted :)
    Great work!
     
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    Thanks Horace !

    @ Evezdroppin, I agree a lot of people have said that actually, stoked you like the drums always felt they were my weak point. Tune abit of a breakthrough for me. Next one will be better hopefully haha
     
  12. DJ DropStop

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    Nice! Loved the smooth and relaxing intro :D I was thinking maybe at 1:06 you might want to bring in some heavier drums? A little change at 2:10ish would be good to keep things fresh too. Other than that, awesome tune!
     
  13. spyre

    spyre sample all the things

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    Awesome tune, if the drums were punchier it would be superawesome. Try a transient shaper on them?
     
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    Very nice, love the bass voice you made, sounds lush. Just like others that 2.10 point needs a bit more for me.
     
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    really nice tune. that snares got a need for mirrors columbia sound to it, sounds lovely. really like the vocal too. big track
     
  16. st420

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    thanks man!