First draft here, any ideas re. arrangement, sound etc?

[PeriodicDisturbance]

Thanks for checking this out, been taking the comments and putting them to use.


https://soundcloud.com/michael-goetz-975677037%2Fcenobyte

 

[Dan JJJJJJ]

Not going to lie mate I prefer other stuff you have posted...somehow it just doesn't all pull together for me somehow. Saying that, the production sounds fairly crisp and I like the bassline when it comes in...but then the other sounds that some in kind of ruin the vibe for me.