I love the idea! The arrangement is good, but I'm sure if I'm keen on those drums... They feel a bit too light.
Also, the mixdown feels a bit rushed. It's not bad, but it could be a bit better.
The voice cutting and stuff is awesome though
As Crizis pointed out, idea is very good. But mixdown needs A LOT more work. More bass(strong sub), punchier drums that drive the tune(bring up the kick mate), more warmth for synth and vocal, seems either you have cut out too much on these elements or they are not properly spread out in stereo. Very hard to judge the mix tbh. Try applying distortion to many of your elements there. Try highpassing vocal and pluck synth at about 200Hz to get some warmth and weight back.