You're being quite brave by sharing your earliest tracks, generally people keep their early work to themselves until they've reached a good level. Anyway nobody can expect their first, second, or even third tracks to be any good, it might take 100 tracks before people start to take notice, so don't give up
Finally thanks for the feedback. I know for a fact i suck but everyone does when they start. Also i need to get my hands on a keyboard i can hook up to my pc because it's hard getting a good bassline in fruity loops without one.