didnt mean to if i did man. Thats just what i think about the tune and id get both a second and ninth opinion before taking me seriously.
By thematic i mean find tunes with elements in them that you really like and try to expand on them. Find a tune with a break you think is cool and try to take it forward. Listen to i dont know konflicts cyanide and find a few good fills there you can take the concepts from and make your own versions of.
Dont jack anything tho. I nicked an fx sample from rob f & impulse on my last tune and got scolded for it on DOA. I think its ok to sample FX cos you cant build a tune around it like a break or a bassline but this one... im not sure if its going to stay in there. Ill have to synthesise my own.