'breathing in fumes'...please check it out

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  1. collymore

    collymore Member

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    Have not been to productive lately but have managed to made this track called 'breathing in fumes'

    http://soundcloud.com/cookie-jaar

    Please check it out, and let me know what you think

    Thanks....
     
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    This shit is awesome man, lovin the old skool viiibes
     
  3. collymore

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    Thanks fishy...just checked your deep connection out, do I need to say that I agree with all the previous comments to that track...so nice
     
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    glad u like it man:)
     
  5. collymore

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    any other comments...need the feedback to get further with the track

    cheers,
     
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    Well it defenetly needs some variation in drums because right now its sound very repetitive. And i think that the bass is too much in stereo.
     
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    Thanks for feedback Sann.....
    I will work on the drums....
     
  8. dar kist

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    drums need some layers. do like the vibe, yea defo to much stereo on the bass, put as much mid range bass in stero as you lke, but the sub bass must be mono. track is repetitive, throw some variation i there.

    dig the track, will keep an eye out when you post the finished track
     
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    Cheers Dar Kist.....I will have a look at your suggetions for improvement...
     
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    nice track man.
    dig the bassline. few more variations on it would be nice, imo. but like the sound.
    drums sound pretty muck ok to me. a bit more eq'ing might help. but patern is nice.
    good stuff dude :)
     
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    horace111 My name is Jago (HYQXYZ)

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    Sounds really nice man, really like the drums and the vibe you got going on there, indeed needs some variation. Keep up the good work!
     
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    Thanks for the last comments appriciate them...I am really strugling with the variations...running out of ideas...
     
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    The tack have been updated...not sure to the better. Tried to take some of your comments into consideration..Thanks. Let me know what you think....

    http://soundcloud.com/cookie-jaar/breathing-in-fumes-2