Hey man! I'm listening to yout track right now, and it's pretty clear that you're a Dnb producer who wanted to give dubstep a try. If this was MY track, I'd make the intro shorter, like 30 seconds or so. Maybe give that vocals some glitching, this would go well with that "8-bit" sound you got there too. And wobbles. Wobbles all the time. Dubstep was (and is) built on wobbles.
Oh, and answering your "edit" question, IMO for a 3:31 song, half of it being "beatless" parts may kill the song, you know?
Anyways, besides what I said, I think that melodically the track was very well made, ans everything works well in the mix! Also, I must say that I'm not technically experient, but I listen to electronic music for ages now, so my ears are pretty good.
Keep it up, man!