could do with more going on in the intro to keep it interesting fx etc
not too bad for your second tune mate much better than my second attempt, there is lots to improve, but that will come with time and practise, theres certainly some good ideas in there.
a few things to look into to start you off,
layering drums to get better sounds, snares etc
subtle fx to keep thing interesting
variation in percussion
automation of synth perameters again to add interest to tunes
bloody good start tho mate keep it up