Artificial - Menacing Vacuum Cleaner

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  1. Artificial2

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    This is my 4th attempt at trying to make a DnB tune, so try not to laugh. I called it Menacing Vacuum Cleaner because at least part of the tune reminds me of those old vacuum cleaners with a headlight at the front, so that you could hoover in the dark of course. Nah, actually I just like the name.

    It's quite slow at 160 bpm and there's no melody whatsoever. I'd just like to know if people think this sounds quite interesting, a mess or repetetive boredom.

    I used FL by the way and it's not even EQed as I don't really know what I'm doing. I listened to it with headphones and it's not too bad, so please have a listen and don't be cruel. ;)

    Cheers.

    http://www.musicv2.com/listen.php?m=56945

    version 2: http://www.musicv2.com/listen.php?m=57037
     
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    Hmm, 16 views and 3 listens. Maybe I'm too self-deprocating. It's not that bad basically. There's quite a bit of variation in there for example.

    I said don't be cruel but if you think it's totally shit then please let me know. What could I do to improve it? Feedback please. :)
     
  3. thin king

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    wowsers thats some heavy bass nice work on that front, the snare is way too flat though and does get a bit boring quite quickly - it needs some change ups here and there so get some drum loops and get cutting up - keep at mate its not bad for a newbe - oh and the best way to get more feedback is to comment as much as poss on other peoples stuff then they will return the favour!!
     
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    Ah cheers bro, much appreciated. Glad you quite like the bass. Yeah I should really have used drum loops rather than trying to make my own beat. I take it you mean I need to use the fruity slicer in FL to edit some drum loops for variation. I think I know how to do that, so I'll get on it. :)

    Thanks again man. Peace.
     
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    hey you don't always have to use drum loops - I like to make my own as much as poss using battery, but sometimes you can't beat a breaks fill here and there it just helps to add interest and if done well - really can make a tune and yeah FL slicer will do just fine - keep at it!
     
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    Nice one mate. I'm having a go at making a second version of it. I started by taking out all the drums and replaced them with an old school style amen break, which I rearranged sections of for variation. Listening to it though the variation doesn't notice much and it just sounds like a repetetive drum loop. So I'm gonna try either cutting it more ruthlessly, using several different breaks or (as you've just suggested) use my own drum loop and use a break as a fill now and then. I've also changed one of the synth sounds a bit because it sounded particularly lame and added some filtering aswell. To make that snare fatter I'll add some layers to it.

    I hope it sounds like I'm learning. :D This tune is never gonna be any good but I'll tweak it a bit more anyway.

    Cheers. :)
     
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    JunglelisticG I ♥ Drum'N'Bass

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    Is it still up? I cant hear anythink :confused:

    I might just be jhavin a blond moment :lol:
     
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