This is very dense. Like you have a LOT of layers going on here, and most of them are playing all the time. You have two basses! Which is great, but maybe not at the same time.
A lot of your phrases start on the first beat of the bar and play the whole way through with no rest on top of each other getting in the way of each other.
It's more common to have longer phrases, that have lots of space in-between where other bits can come in.
You don't have any kind of melodic/harmonic/changes in notes you're playing either, which is ok for a bit (this is dnb ofc) but you could think about changes to the notes in some sections as well.
I also think doing faster and faster kicks for a build up is very cliche, but maybe that's just me