i'll echo what's already been said, although i do like the way the hats have been programmed. i agree that the contrast maybe too big between the percussion elements, but if that's addressed i would be straight on the download, really nice stuff.
Intro is pretty, I like the piano that sound washed with the synth. The drop is way to sudden, but good. Listening to this, I feel where you are coming from and can see the beauty in the track. This has real potential but you need a better mix down. That comes with time and more experience than I have but this track with the right help would be beautiful.