A lyric i wrote lastnight to a track called ' TIME ' recording it 2day..FEEDBACK PLEZ

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TIME ..

Did you ever try grab a second , nab a second back,
for a second hand second plan , quick take a second man ,
Run it back,
Stop patching with brica-brac my avatars hatchin,
I Found a scar scratchin the realms of the pendulum,
Stackin shelves broken with bitter sweet sentiments,
Open a book of spells suger shells washed on a sea of salt fading,
See a fault wade in, I sit and shout fumin,
Its all hell from here on out,
As the petal fell down theres a new one sprout ,
Jacks broken his crown now jill wants out,
Disfigured and vacant,
His young mind taken
Stuck in a rut,
With His cauldron bubblin with rubble n skunk,
In the doldrums crumblin suckin his thumb,
stuck in the sum still mumbling wi suttin to say
But his portraits ageing its Dorien Gray
Theres a judas in his paintin,
How the truth taste ? Its glue
for new patients
Glued to playstations
I try skip thru the chicken coup
Passing thru clucking out a different tune
Looking thru key hole to peak thru,
Devil and the deep blue
Level you can keep an ear to
The cancer flossed screams,
of yesterdays kids grippin candy floss dreams,
sands of time bring no sandcastle kings,
I regret I reflect these panoramic scenes …
I regret I reflect these panoramic scenes …


was off the dome piece .. recroding it 2day with 2 other lads who always have fresh barssings so its gunna be hefty betty all round

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Fucking sick.

Feelin' it.

Up the audio when you're done please :2thumbs:
 

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its good man, i quite like it. try and record it, post in production forum. give us the finished product, thats what counts you know. i wrote some lyrics too the other day, maybe you would like to read them
 
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they're deadly, really liking them. good flow to it. looking forward to hearing the track
 

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cheers .. yh it is all about the recording and delivery ure right .. so ill get the finished product up too .. logiks .. yh ill read em .. im guessing its going to be a limerick about felching however
 

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no, its turned out to be a rant against modern times and facebook. mines rather more tangible than yours, by george. but i dont know where they are, im gonna have to get back to you
 

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sounds good .. go for it .. its interesting writing lyrics .. just watch the pen move and see what the brain farts out .. wake up in the morning and read back and see how weird you are
 

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sure is fun. mines more for singing or perhaps an ursula rucker type of thing. its for a girl, but i did some nice word trickery, according to some. girls are shit anyway.
 

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Sound nice bruv, can't wait to hear the recorded piece.

I should have stuff done within the month!
 

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.. just watch the pen move and see what the brain farts out .. wake up in the morning and read back and see how weird you are
^^Exactly this mate, always surprise myself with how weird the lyrical content is the next day.

This is sounding really good mate, the content is really interesting and the flow rolls off your tongue nicely, looking forward to hearing the recording of this. I should have some new stuff recorded soon.
 

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It's weird how lyrics come to you innit. I'll bang a beat on, freestyle some generic shit. Then all of a sudden, a nice bar or few bars come out. Then again, sometimes you think that, then the next day you just think "nah, that's pretty shit"

Sketcha, you got any stuff recorded? PM me a link to your stuff man, I'll listen to it soon hopefully.
 

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It's weird how lyrics come to you innit. I'll bang a beat on, freestyle some generic shit. Then all of a sudden, a nice bar or few bars come out. Then again, sometimes you think that, then the next day you just think "nah, that's pretty shit"

Sketcha, you got any stuff recorded? PM me a link to your stuff man, I'll listen to it soon hopefully.
yeah mate, check out my sound cloud, none of the tracks are properly mastered and theres bits in all of them that need tweeking, but yeah have a listen and let me know what you think,

http://soundcloud.com/mc-sketchamus

One of my tracks is in my sig too
 
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