yeah a few fills here and there mate wouldnt hurt im surprised you done this on a home stereo impressed! but iv listen to it a couple more times on rokit 6s defo need more sub mate but sounds wicked. plus does anyone actually know where these vocals originaly come from?
For first attempt mate not bad but needs work, im not really feeling the drums maybe cut up a loop to roll behind yours, plus i think fragments is rite sounds to happy! imo if you made your bassline dirty and louder it would balance the mood abit more. Good work mate :-)